When I started Occupational Therapy for my hand/wrist several months ago, one of the questions asked during the intake session was, "What is your learning style?" Several examples were given and I chose, "demonstration."
My therapist showed me pictures of the exercises needed to
restore my function and demonstrated them. She used terms like, "Bend your
fingers at the second knuckle, not the first one." "How do you hold a key? Now, press your
thumb into the therapy clay to simulate that movement." Her instructions,
descriptions, and demonstrations helped me understand and perform the
exercises.
I thought about my learning style for writing. Cramming long
blocks of text into my head didn't cut it for me. A lot of words confuse me.
Visuals help, but are not sufficient for me to "get it." Examples and
descriptions put pictures to the words.
So, what works? My editor, Deirdre
Lockhart, of Brilliant Cut Editing, figured it out. Here are a few examples of
her instructions:
1. Excerpt:
He doubted either of these women ever heard of disco music or bell-bottom
pants. Editor's comment:
" Adorable line, but...if he is 46, in 2016, then he was born in 1970. His
prime "dating" years would have been late 80s-90s. Definitely no
bell-bottoms, scarcely any disco. He only remembers those as something
snickered at in old shows - unless you are referring to the 70s resurgence of
the early 2000s."
Revision:
"He doubted either of these women ever heard of "Walk Like an
Egyptian" or velour shirts." Editor's
comment in next edit: "Great and perfectly timed revision,
Susan."
2. Excerpt: "They rode in silence, but the tension
remained." Editor's comment:
"How does he feel this? What does he see to show him Dan feels it too?
Show."
Revision: "They rode in silence, but Dan's mouth
slashed across his face in a straight line. Maybe he could give it one more
shot."
3. Excerpt:
"Lindsey seemed to relax." Editor's
comment: "How can he tell? A soft smile? Little color returning to
her pallid checks? What? Show. Share!"
Revision:
"Lindsey shrugged, and she resumed jogging."
My editor used examples and
descriptive language to communicate the changes she wanted. This worked well
for me.
Disclaimer: I did not receive any payment for this endorsement. I've used this service and highly recommend it.
Writers and Readers: What's your
learning style? Written instructions? Demonstration? Pictures? Other? Please
share.
Photo Credit: Holger Selover-Stephan
Photo Credit: Holger Selover-Stephan
2 comments:
I like the examples you shared, Susan. We're always learning and polishing our writing, aren't we? Glad you found a great editor. Have a good week!
Hi Karen -
Thanks for stopping by and commenting. I was amazed at how much I learned from a professional during the editing process.
God bless,
Susan
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